Well, I sincerely hope you aren''t trying for an even remotely "realistic" storyline here. This is further from reality than some of the fantasy stories here, and that''s serious flaw in a genre like Sci-Fi where the possibilty is what makes it so intriguing.
uggg....
First off, can you seriously see all the nations of Earth being united into a single political entity by 2012? I''m from Canada, so we know a little about trying to get states to join/stay in a federal union - like that would have to be; it''s very difficuly. Hell, to keep ONE, ethnically similar majority pacified took us almost 30 years - and they wanted to stay! Now extrapolate for thousands, and you''ve got an impossiblity.
Dates can be changed...
Secondly, you can''t have "not-so" distant universes. There is only one (quantum theory be damnned) and it''s very large. Your statement makes no sense.
Hows not so distant galaxies?
Third, why is the ship named GRUNTAKTICA? Because it sounds cool, is my feeling. Generally ships are not named for nonsensical, if cool-sounding, words.
Got a better name? Please suggest?
Forth, it''s frankly impossible to get an agency founded in 2021 to build a ship the size of NY before 2056. No production technology is even remotely feasible that would allow such a timeframe. Hell, the DESIGN phase would probably take that long.
Hmm... Dates can be changed
Fifth, how is a "12-year journey" going to explore the "outer-most regions of space". As far as I know, faster than light travel doesn''t have any basis in reality or your version thereof.
I told my friend that, I was thinking 120 years... (opinions?)
Sixth, how did the transfer of ALL earth''s prisoners to mars take place in a single year? Sounds impossible to me.
Seventh, how are the COM able to raise an army and gain access to unimaginably powerful explosives on a barren, airless world that was designed to be a prison colony? "Well, we just figured we could leave the bombs there with all the prisoners..."
Critical story part was left out there (he forgot I guess):
They find a crashed ship on a dark "corner" of mars. Fix it up with some of the laser guns the Earth people left ''em (hoping they would kill each other or something) and went to a newly dicovered planet (by them obviously) and found what they needed built up a small economy and there you have it.
Eighth, why would a cold-fusion plant be on the moon if it''s powering earth? Earth has lots of land, and cold-fusion plants aren''t all that large (in principle)
Hmm, how bout a large solar plant or something.... better: they turned the moon into a large cold-fusion (wait... what is cold fusion LOL seriously) plant because they needed extra power for GRUNTAKTICA
Ninth, why blow up the moon? Why not just the plant? Sounds like drama for it''s own sake.
Read above... the moon is now the cold fusion plant
Tenth, seriously rethink this plot. It''s got holes the size of, well, that moon-explosion you detailed.
Well, thanks for the help.
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